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Meaningless by ~jacquelinekaychan:iconjacquelinekaychan:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


And here I’m left stranded
There’s no one else there
You promised you’d love me
You promised you’d care
I’m standing here empty
I’m frozen inside
You promised you’d love me
And you said goodbye
Meaningless feelings
And poisonous rhymes
I’m broken and beaten
Left dying inside
I’m extending a hand
I promise I’ll try
And you don’t reach up to save me
As you say goodbye
All these meaningless feelings
Don’t feed me your lies
You don’t make this easy
So don’t say you tried
Because you left me here stranded
Alone left to die
©2008-2009 ~jacquelinekaychan
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Submitted: May 10, 2008
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Nothing to say about this one.
Something that rather came to me as I opened word and started typing.

Energy gets the best of me when I use it right.

Comments welcome.
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~Pola-444:iconPola-444: May 10, 2008, 8:50:12 PM
pretty good!! I like the rhyming bit you got going on in it

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~jacquelinekaychan:iconjacquelinekaychan: May 10, 2008, 8:52:49 PM
Yeah I know you don't care for rhyming much but it's more of slant rhymes. I'm glad you like it! =D

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~XTwilight-VampiressX:iconXTwilight-VampiressX: May 11, 2008, 12:01:19 PM
dood that is seriously how i feel right now! how on earth did you do that?! lol

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~rebelnijamaster:iconrebelnijamaster: May 11, 2008, 2:22:19 PM
wow... that was really awesome.

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~Pola-444:iconPola-444: May 11, 2008, 2:22:39 PM
=D

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I love fully and completely, even though I know I may get hurt. It's how I live.
=TimetravelerJoe made my lovely avatar!
Clubs: =RawEm0tion =sunsets
~jacquelinekaychan:iconjacquelinekaychan: May 11, 2008, 2:45:42 PM
I don't know, I seriously wasn't feeling this way, I just opened word and it's like the words came to me without me thinking about them.

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~jacquelinekaychan:iconjacquelinekaychan: May 11, 2008, 3:52:29 PM
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!

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Would your maker have opened your eyes if
he'd preferred them closed?
~xaxpoetsxheartx:iconxaxpoetsxheartx: May 12, 2008, 2:49:17 PM
good job jackie, i really liked it, even though it rhymed
~jacquelinekaychan:iconjacquelinekaychan: May 16, 2008, 6:08:09 AM
Thanks- I know how most people don't like rhymes that's why it's more of a slant rhyme

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Would your maker have opened your eyes if
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